Most make this paper harder than others, it should be as easy as asking some questions and writing the answers down. I'm Danielle Perez I've played softball since I was 8 and have not been in a stable home for more than a year in the last 4 years. In the making of this paper I enjoyed it because it gave me some time to sit aside and really find out more about my grandma, Yes grandparents always love telling their stories but there's never a time you really sit there and ask several different questions that can actually mean something to the time change of today. Talking with my grandmother got me thinking our generations really have not progressed in all positive ways, By the end of my paper you will see there are positives about some of our benefits but you'd be surprised with the amount of negatives. I interviewed My grandma Dawn because I respect her and look up to her very much, She is one of the most straight forwardest people I know, and she will always tell you the truth and guide you to making the best decisions.
Your introduction sounded good and flows pretty well. You only had a couple errors with putting a comma instead of a period. I liked how you told the reader what you were going to say and had great information about yourself and the person you are going to interview.
ReplyDeleteyou had a good introduction, but I think you should add more details but overall its was real good.
ReplyDeleteI liked your introduction, it was nice to hear about how your grandma is there for you.(as what I got out of that) and that you might not have a table home for more then a year but you always have a table person to go to. I would like to read your paper when you get it all done, your grandma sounds a lot like mine, honest, blunt and straight to the point. You're lucky to have her around:)
ReplyDeleteThis is a great introduction because you foreshadow what you will be talking about and you make the reader feel for you. When you said that writing this paper should be easy and then proceeded to say that you haven't lived in a stable house makes us feel that you deserve something. You then talk about your grandma and we become happy because we know you have someone. You really catch a readers feelings and that's what would make us want to continue to read.
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